Juno Kim Says: Hi, Hiroshi! This is an awesome illustration; you have confident lines and hopefully, a passion for art in the same intensity. ^^ Yahiko's hair is great, and you've also added very distinct shadows of his bangs, which gives the illustration great depth. You've said in your strengths/weaknesses that you'd like to improve on drawing the human form and clothing. Those two subjects are hard to explain (I'm such a lousy explainer) but here we go anyway. ^^ The human body(form) is a mysterious subject; it can range in so many sizes, shapes, colors, and everything else, it's impossible to explain its pattern in one blow. This same abundance of variety goes with drawing the human body as well. For example, how CLAMP draws a girl's body is different from how, say, Akira Kamiyama draws his girls' bodies. But anyway, in Yahiko's case, the left arm (your left) came out nicely, but the right arm bends sort of in a curvy manner. Arms don't curve in that way because we only have 2 places where we can bend it: the elbow and wrist. Yahiko's arm, therefore, should bend a bit higher on the arm. Yahiko's waist could, on the other hand, go down a bit moreˇ¦ if you do that, then the arms won't look as long as they do now (though that's not a biggie.^^) On Yahiko's face, the chin should move more towards the right (your right) because, in most cases, the chin, lips, nose, and forehead are lined up in a straight line on the face. Because the face is round, the chin must follow directly under the lips. Okay, well, on to clothes. Clothes is also a very difficult subject; once again, there are a billion-and-one ways in drawing it. Your lines are strong, but try to smooth them out a little, and here's the trick: try to draw clothes in long solid lines, and draw as little as possible. Cloth is fluid by nature, and the key in capturing that ˇ°clothinessˇ± is drawing in swift, single lines. As for the creases and folds, take a tablecloth or something and drape it across a varied surface, and draw it. That's the only way you can learn how to do itˇ¦ nobody can really teach you how to draw it because it's a super-hard subject and, once again, a very versatile one at that.^^ It's been a privilege to critique your illustration for me. You have great potential, keep up the marvelous work. Ciao!^^

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Arion McBride Says: Gidday Lad. First off, nice weapons he's holding. I am confident given the chance I would cut my own arms off before I could even get one hit in on an opponent =P My complements include you have some decent starts with shading though the shadow on the neck should be more under his chin and down the side a bit on his gi. Guessing how light would reflect can be tricky. As far as drawing the human form there are a few things I'd note.. In most manga style, the lines for the eyes don't usually connect all the way around. The sides are left open a bit. for placement and such you should start with stick figures, circles and guidelines in light pencil and then draw your picture around those. Your chin will be better aligned and the forms will come out nicer. Don't be afraid to use more curves. Especially with younger boys and children. Like women in anime, they have more soft rounded features. It's only the men that generally have the more straight angles. this is not a golden rule mind you...As far as cloth goes, well that can and can't be difficult. To do really awesome folds and such takes awhile. I haven't mastered it yet to any great degree. Simple folds though aren't difficult to pick up at all. When you look at some of these really amazing folds that some artists do, it's easy to be blown away and get discouraged. Don't worry about that yet Start simple. for an example, I used two of my old drawings and cut out a tiny section from each and put them in an image showing an example of some easy folds you could work with. Go Here to see them. Keep up the good work lad ^_^

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GlassShard Says: Hey Hiroshi ^_^ The abstract/simplified thing you've got going on here isn't too bad. There's nothing wrong with a blocky, more angular style, just work a bit more on proportions and nailing specifics. Curve a few of your lines, just to make things more dynamic. Add curve to his arms, his shoulders, it'll just add a lot more movement to his pose. As for his clothes, the don't look to bad, observe wrinkles in your own clothing, pay attention to how it bunches up at the elbows when you bend them and the way it hangs from your shoulders. Long sleeved big tee-shirts are good for this. Okay? Okay. Good luck ^_^