Dragonfly Says: Hey Bokson~! Wow, this is a really cool piece you've drawn here. I love the plane, it looks very realstic, which is something I'd love to see from artists ^^

The size of the character to the plane is also good, as well as your background choice. Anyway with that said, I guess I should point out the things you can improve on, otherwise this critique would be useless, so let's begin;

First thing would be the overall mood of the piece. You've drawn the character and the plane fairly small, so the emphasis is more on the overal piece, rather then the character. This is okay, and there's nothing wrong with doing that. Just that when I'm drawing a pin-up, I find the piece is stronger, when you try and make the character as large as possible, since that's usually what the viewer looks at first. I'd love (or I guess I would draw) a pretty tight close up of the girl sitting on the wing of the plane like you have here.

Anyway getting back to the piece. In the background, I can't really tell if they are supposed to be trees or cloud? If it is cloud, it seems to be fairly low to the ground. And if they are trees, or bushes, I'd suggest maybe adding more details to it. Add a lot more shadding throughout the tree bushes, not just on top.

I really like this piece, and I think it would look great when finished. Keep up the great work!

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Juno Says: Hoiiii, Bokson~!! Before I say anything else, your illustration is VERY, VERY slick. :D I admire artists who challenge themselves by drawing people and the right atmospheres/settings to go with them because it's a sign of great potential. Your sketch illustrates both your technical skill level (which I definitely believe is beyond intermediate) and your skills with perspective and overall composition. I understand that you requested for advice on hand and clothfold work. How large is this picture? In this case, I don't think you'll have to worry about those, unless you really want to pack the detail. The plane is great!!! :D My only suggestions at this point would be to make the clouds more spread out, and more...what's the word? Fluffy? Perhaps move them up a bit, too. If you decide to color this pic, make sure to designate a proper light source so you can get all the highlights and shadows in the right places. I'm thinking of this scene with the pilot and his plane lounging on a beautiful, breezy sunny day on a grassy cliff, like in most Miyazaki films :D If you pull it off, it would be absolutely breathtaking.

Awesome work, Bokson. I applaud your approach to more than the human form. Ciao for now~! :D

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Kon Says: Hey BoksonD!.. =D

Woooo!.. first impression.. nice plane!.. Hmmm.. I know you ask for advice on hands and folds.. but.. the character is a bit small to critiqued that part.. O_O Well.. it seems like the main focus of this image is the plane.. it's in the center.. and it's pretty large... so that pretty much makes it the center of focus... which is not bad. The character would be second. You have your proportion pretty good... nice job!...

OK.. now for the what can be improve part. Hmmm.. I'm not sure what's in the background either.. is it clouds are is it mountains?.... or tree lines perhaps?.. well.. either way.. it can be more define.

Well.. there isn't much left I can complain about.. except go ahead and finish it already!.. =P